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Talumpuk Peninsula

Talumpuk Peninsula is a district in Pakpanang County, Nakhon Sri Thammarat Province. This peninsula created by the transportation of shore sand from the south, west, and north in the Gulf of Thailand and the impulsion of a stream from mountain Nakorn Sri Thamaraj ranges. Talumpuk Penninsula is a suitable location for trading and transporting goods around the world.

10 years ago, before the flooding occurred every afternoon. There are ring net Chinese boats and padding boats all over the peninsula. These boats carried fresh fishes, shrimps and other seafood to the Pakpanang Market. Pakpanang residents always enjoy fresh seafood from Talumpuk fishermen.

Hurricane Depression hit Talumpuk Pennissula on 25 October 2505. It was the worst hurricane in history. It was rains all day consecutively, afternoon and evening got multiply intensity and overcast sky. The Pakpanang seniors claimed, they have never seen this type of tornado. It was too much rain, wind, tide, wave, and flood covered all over the peninsula. Some houses where begin to totter separate, destroy suddenly. Hundred of People climbed and got on roofs of some stable houses. Once the terror storm gone, there are countless dead bodies all over the beach. Most survivors stayed in mangrove forest because it reduced the heavy tide and wind.

Just one night, all the houses and property were destroyed, countless dead bodies, and homeless people.

Location

Talumpuk Peninsula, Nakon Sri Thammarat covered by two districts in Pakpanang County which are Talumpuk Penninsula district and East Pakpanang District. There is the boundary, as follow

North Adjacent to Gulf of Nakhon Sri Thammarat in Tasala District

South Adjacent to Bangpra District

East Adjacent to Gulf of Thailand

West Adjacent to Gulf of Pakpanang and Gulf of Thailand

Answer 1

Talumpuk Peninsula

Talumpuk Peninsula is a district in Pakpanang County, Nakhon Sri Thammarat Province. This peninsula was created by the transportation of shore sand from the south, west, and north in the Gulf of Thailand and the impulsion of a stream from the Nakorn Sri Thamaraj mountain ranges. Talumpuk Penninsula is a suitable location for trading and transporting goods around the world.

(10 years ago, before the flooding occurred every afternoon)i would reword this somehow). There are ring net Chinese boats and padding boats all over the coast of the peninsula. These boats carry fresh fish, shrimp and other seafood to the Pakpanang Market. Pakpanang residents always enjoy fresh seafood from Talumpuk fishermen.

Hurricane Depression hit Talumpuk Pennissula on 25 October 2505. It was the worst hurricane in history. There was constant rain, afternoon and evening got multiple intensity and overcast sky. The Pakpanang seniors claimed, they have never seen this type of tornado. It was too much rain, wind, tide, wave, and flood covered the entire peninsula. Some houses began to separate or suddenly collapse. Hundreds of people climbed and got on roofs of stable houses. Once the terror storm was gone, there were countless dead bodies covering the beach. Most survivors stayed in mangrove forest because it reduced the heavy tide and wind.

Just one night, all the houses and property were destroyed, countless dead bodies, and homeless people.

Location

Talumpuk Peninsula, Nakon Sri Thammarat covered by two districts in Pakpanang County which are Talumpuk Penninsula district and East Pakpanang District. The boundaries are as follows:

North Adjacent to Gulf of Nakhon Sri Thammarat in Tasala District

South Adjacent to Bangpra District

East Adjacent to Gulf of Thailand

West Adjacent to Gulf of Pakpanang and Gulf of Thailand

Answer 2

Talumpuk district was developed  with the help of a transport company to collect  sand from  the  stream from  a mountain- range.The  place is  suitable location for trade and  transport goods

10 years back, floods occurred and Chinese boats,and  padding boats  collected  fish, shrimps and  seafood to  market. The residents always receive fresh seafood from  fishermen

Depression hit the district  and badly  rained   People never saw such a tornado.Many houses were destroyed. Hundreds of People climbed  up to the roofs .Once the storm was over countless dead bodies were seen over the  beach. Survivors took shelter in  mango-gardens. one night, all the houses and their property was also destroyed