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Please help me to fix this paragraphs.

One of these days I am going to be a film director. Film directing is something that I am passionate about. Just standing on the set with camera gets me thrilled. Being a director, I will get to meet famous celebrities, talk to them and get to know them better.

I really love to travel and this is the job exactly what will provide me, travel around the places and meet new people.

I really love to be in control of people that is another reason why I go for directing. Being a director I will get infinite benefits like meeting celebrities, attend private parties, travel, being in control of people and etc.

Answer 1

One of these days I am going to be a film director. Film directing is something that I am passionate about. Just standing on the set with camera gets me thrilled. Being a director, I will get to meet famous celebrities, talk to them and get to know them better.

I really love to travel and this is the job exactly what will provide me, travel around the places and meet new people.

I really love to be in control of people that is another reason why I go for directing. Being a director I will get infinite benefits like meeting celebrities, attend private parties, travel, being in control of people and etc.

Answer 2

One of these days I am going to be a film director. Film directing is something that I am passionate about. Just standing on the set with a camera makes me feel thrilled.

Being a director, I will get to meet famous celebrities, talk to them and get to know them better.

I really love to travel and this is the job which will provide me with this, travelling around places and meeting new people.

I really love to be in control of people; that is another reason why I go for directing.



Being a director I will get infinite benefits like meeting celebrities, attend private parties, travel, being in control of people etc

(Good luck with this by the way. If you want to do this then you go for it. be what you want to be!)

Answer 3

First of all your question should read, "Please help me fix these paragraphs?"

You have about 3-4 paragraphs all jumbled together.   Do you homeschool?  Ask your mom or dad to correct it.  There are way too many errors for one to fix online.  

I am not trying to be rude, but you really need someone to help you with it and that someone should be sitting next to you, so that they can explain things and answer your questions.

Good luck.

Answer 4

One of these days I am going  to become a film director. I am passionate about film directing. I am thrilled just standing on a set with a camera.

Film directing will also give me a unique opportunity to control other people's actions. I enjoy being the person in control and in charge of a project.

I love to travel, and this job will also provide me with achange to travel around the world, meeting new people and experiencing new cultures. I'll be able to attend private parties and meet with the rich and famous.

[Note: You could provide stronger examples of the things that are unique about directing. Are you interested in acting and drama? Are you interested in interpreting a story for the screen? Think about other benefits you might get from this job--what kind of money would you earn; would you get time off between projects?

Answer 5

Hi this is good accept for the being in control of people,change that,,like, i like being in control,

or i like being in control of things,

It just sounds better is all..

Answer 6

One of these days I am going to be a film director, it is my passion.  Being on the set and holding the camera is thrilling.  Many perks come with this job such as meeting celebrities and traveling to various places.  I am the type of person who wants to be in control and this is one profession where this is possible.

Answer 7

well done then lol

Answer 8

The sentences are a bit choppy and there should be an "a" before camera in the first paragraph.  The sentence about "I really like to travel..." is confusing and should be rephrased.  Perhaps...."I really like to travel and this job will afford me that opportunity.  I will be able to travel the world and meet new people."  You use the phrase "I really" too much and should try to fix that.  Perhaps, " One reason I would like to go into directing is because I like to have control over people."  Also, do not end your paragraph with "etc."  It has an unfinished feel to it.

Answer 9

My dream career is to be a film director.  I feel such passion for all the aspects of directing from standing on the set to meeting celebrities, working with them and getting to know them on a personal basis.  I think traveling to different locations, different parts of the world would be an exciting part of being in the film industry.  There are many benefits to being a film director including; attending private parties, using my creativity to create my thoughts on film and interacting with many types of people and celebrities.