2 other Poems I made

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anyway these are two I just made for my gf =P tell me if their good anyway you can check for the other ones I made on my profile called sunshine and loss and tragedy if you liek these.

Sparks

The sparks that ignited our love were meant to burn meant to unleash all the love I kept inside and let it rain on u. You brung the rain You made my heart sing and let the bells in my head ring the ring awoke me to u there and made me consous of u there waiting for me. I took ur hand brought you to me held u close and we danced in the name of love. I felt weightless there as it seemed the only keeping my legs up were you. You made me feel different consous of the world around me and whenever u were there I felt like all was well as it would seem whenever im with u I would go on journeys wishing to never end but to see you part made me sad as I remember what I had but then then I see your face and my heart begins to race and we go from a trot to a run and in the setting sun we cling together as eskimos in the cold my heart felt so bold as to embrace one as you I felt it oculdnt be trie but I felt it can be love. When push comes to shove I shove other feelings away and I jsut want to say how much I wanna hold you how much I wanna give my heart to know we never part and see there with me and be together eternally. As you are the spark of the flame in my heart that made me feel love.

Fallen Angel

You my angel my all I saw the day u fall u fell from heaven and I knew it was a gift from god to me to know that we would be forever under his eyes and sitting under the palm trees i look into ur eyes and I tell you i love u and tears fill your eyes as she says I do nothing out from words expressed what I said it was just that kept oging over and over in my head. Will u marry me will she let us be or for one day to part as this will surely break my heart I cant bare see you go I want the whole world to know ur my baby your my soul and I just wnat you to know I love more than a sister your closer to me than a friend and I hope your with me till the very end as you forever was and I cant bear see us part as you are the closest thing i keep to my heart. I trust ur judgement because I know you will be my angel from the heavens and I love you still. And to this day I will forever let you know youll forever be my baby and I love you so.

Btw just to clarify I aint some old guy making poems im 14 so tell me if Im good for my age.

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thats great i love them both your poems are great and express how you feel so i think she will love them and your only 14 thats great im 15 (: i like writing poems to :P i like yours alot.

heres one of my favorites

So many dreams of you and me

Painting a picture of something to see

The ship of my heart sails the darkest seas

Your eye that always glances but never sees

Oh, walk me down the path again

Avoid the path that leads to pain

I will love you forever more

But until that day, my lost soul is still at war.

Let me tell you, it's been to long,

Since I've had the time to sing along.

Let me tell you that it's just begun,

The war inside that can't be won.

So many times I've had to be,

The hanging photo that you can't see

You love to look but you never touch,

My heart is losing it's own self control.

As the ship set it's sails north,

I will let it go out my back door.

And I will walk the only path i know,

And I hope it doesn't cross your road.

So I'll sail the ocean to find myself,

Not caring about what we call health.

I long to be the only one for you,

But until then I don't know what to do

btw what type of music do you like (: like what are your favorite bands?