2 poems, gimme ur opinion?

Question

poem 1

the girl summed up “lovely”

she was talking on the phone

twirling her hair

once realizing, then stopped

she hung up the phone and composed herself

there, on the couch sat

one little petite woman

twirling her hair

poem 2

the dirty windows were not noticed

the roach killer on the counter stood tall

while all the

chairs surrounded the table

napkins sat on the laps of loved ones

the thanksgiving dinner

where a 8 year old boy can serve pumpkin pie

and get coolwhip on his finger

spice, carnavores, dirt, grease, and laughter

that’s what makes a holiday

Answer 1

the first one seems like it just suddenly stops. i mean it makes sense but it just seems like it is not finished. it could be i was never fond of free verse, but i don't know it just stops suddenly.

The second one was good.

Answer 2

Poem 1-

She saw her mother didn't she?? Ha. That's hilarious.

I think this poem needs to be re-written with better capitalization, punctuation, and sentence configuring.

Poem 2 -

I think you are implying roach eating? You b*****d. I just finished eating mushroomed eggs, with cut up hot dogs. That was not very considerate of you. This one isn't that funny. It's kind of sadistic.

Do all the things I said to do to poem 1.