3 More Haiku/Senryu's --Comments please!!?

Question

Need some helpful critique on these are these likable ? Do they sound too child like for an adult? Opinions please !!

I know all about

Different barks piched high-low

Pooch is at the door

Belly's they show me

Oh I give them a good rub

wagging tails I love

Ok jump up, sit

Now stay, roll over three times

Good girl gets biscuit

Answer 1

"Hi!"

That is a very creative story line Haiku about a puppy dog.

I Loved it. Never seen anyone do it like that before.

WELL DONE!  : )

Cheers : )

Answer 2

Great canine off'ring

Read with a cat in my lap

hopes we get no dog

Very charming work!

Answer 3

Tail wagging the dog?

Or is that another tale?

I can never tell!

Animals are great poem fodder....er I mean topics...

Great hai'kus Maltese

Answer 4

As I told you, I'm learning. I don't count but 6 syllables in second line.

It may be I'm wrong.

But I think I counted six.

It is lovely thoughts.

How about this?

Humming birds fly in

eat from feeders all summer

fly back over sea

Truthfully, I think while we are learning, all will be kindergarten stuff. Don't you? I have high hopes of getting better. LOL.

EDIT: If Haiku is three lines 5,7,5 and Senryu's are a three-line ironic or satirical Japanese poem, similar in structure to a haiku - how do we put them together. I could ask this as a question, but you might not see it. Thanks.

Answer 5

Whoopee won't do tricks, but she is cuddly just the same.

can I sit on your lap

I'm feeling lonely today

shut the computer

Answer 6

Your writing and all the comments are beautiful.

Answer 7

Nice. And believable to anyone who has ever owned a dog.  

Doggies love to play

performing all sorts of tricks

just for treats, how smart

Answer 8

Maltese Well, since you surprised

Greetings.