6 senses of dusk........a poem, care to comment?

Question

6 Senses of Dusk (followup to "I came to sing the sea to sleep")

by Jellz Fisher 2006

All my senses

are here as one.

Waves lap and whisper

in the twilight.

Ambient salt,

carried by

the breeze,

brushes my lips.

Decaying life,

exposed to

the elements

makes me aware

of its history.

Night descends,

day closes.

The cycle of

the tides,

the moon

and my life,

begins again.

Answer 1

Reminds me of some happy, quiet evenings fishing from the shore on the Cornish  coast. :-)

Answer 2

sounds like you had an interesting relaxation time at the beach on afternoon

Answer 3

So, "room" temperature salt brushed your lips? lol  That is the only word that while technically correct hung me up in this great sensory read.  This is a keeper.  My compliments.

Answer 4

I really like it..

its kind of mysterious but paints a good picture in my mind as well. Keep it up <)

Answer 5

nicee =)

Answer 6

really good, i write poetry too and i like your style.

Answer 7

the imagery you have used is terrific I really enjoyed reading it and being taken away to a time long ago when I was a child on the beach at dusk on Moreton Island, loved it.