A Dark poem called Broken dreams. Do you like it?

Question

Now i lay myself to sleep

sorry for promises i could'nt keep.

Hope you know i loved you so

but nows the time that i must go.

I've got my poisons one by one

I'll be dead before the sun.

I'm leaving here all alone

and wished someone could of phoned.

Please do not cry for me My life and loves were history.

I know i have done all i could

I'm fading fast and it's feeling good.

For years I've never loved no one

but with you i had so much fun.

Now i see the bright lights calling me'

My life is now a horrible memory....

Answer 1

WOW i love it can i use it on my myspace i well give u all the credit!!!!!!

Answer 2

Thats' kinda emo...lol

But its' good. I like the rhyming scheme. I could see this being sang by some metal band....like Slipknot or something.

Answer 3

i applaud you. *standing ovation*

Answer 4

I really like it except for the phoned part. I don't know why. It just sounds funny. But its a really good poem!

Answer 5

Wow, that's really good!

Answer 6

.extremely dark but good. use imagery submerge me in what ur saying

Answer 7

i really love it!!!

i like the rhyming etc.

you shoud keep writing.

tnx fo sharing anyway.

Answer 8

I hope this poem, and not a sucide note.

Answer 9

This is super. The meter is really well written and the story is sad but compelling. Cool.

Answer 10

Wow... That is an amazing poem. It really speaks to you. I love it. I understood all of it so well.  

Answer 11

This is a very good poem. You are growing as a poet. It is a pleasure for me to watch the process.

Answer 12

HOLY c**p!!!!

You are SO talented

OMJ!

So talented

Gawwwww.

I LOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE it.

=DD

Keep writing!

Pleaseeee

Answer 13

yeah i love it. did u right it cuz if u did ur a genius!!!

Answer 14

i luv it!!!

Answer 15

Sad poem, but one containing self-realization.  Well done.

Answer 16

I really loved this poem alot and cried as i read it.You have written from your inner soul and heart and it shows...Lots of luck..Maria.

Answer 17

Would you mind if I gave you some help with spelling and such?

Only little amendments here and there - but, people take poetry much more seriously when all the i's are dotted and the t's crossed.

Now I lay myself to sleep,

sorry for promises I couldn't keep.

Hope you know I loved you so

but now's the time that I must go.

I've got my poisons, one by one.

I'll be dead before the sun.

I'm leaving here all alone

Wishing someone could've phoned.

Please, do not cry for me.

My life and loves were history

I know I have done all I could.

I'm fading fast and it's feeling good.

For years I've never loved anyone

but, with you I had so much fun.

Now I see the bright lights calling me.

My life now is a horrible memory...

Good luck with your writing

Answer 18

It's umm kind of depressing.. and emo

Answer 19

Melancholy. pretty.