A Poem - Do You Like?

Question

She readies for the land of hope

gathering her necessaries

secured in his brown leather pouch

sage scented and turquoise jeweled

He awaits pacing heavily

observing the stars and his watch

white cotton shirt and faded jeans

dust tinted from the land of hope

Eyes share a moon's revolution

times shift slowly from night to day

rattlesnake asleep benignly

iron rocks warm the land of hope

Answer 1

Beautiful.

I'm a huge fan of repetition.

Answer 2

And I hope the land will fulfill its promise.

Answer 3

She readies for the land of hope

he awaits pacing heavily

eyes share a moon's revolution

Sounds like you have it wrapped up in those 3 lines!  Well said, with great images.

Answer 4

story in a poem lyk wayy.

i say it's nite (:

Answer 5

Me like very much...

Answer 6

poignant and  powerful! your words drop like  eagle feathers from a tall tree. you are a quality wordsmith. bravo!

Answer 7

Who are these two? Where are they going? What is the purpose for their departure? These are all questions that you leave brilliantly unaswered, a blank window of time for us to peer through, with hope, with jealousy, with a tangled snarl of feelings. Excellent and evocative. Go, Marguerite!

Answer 8

Very nice

Answer 9

You did excellent.

Answer 10

If he turns into a rattlesnake, whop him with the iron...

Answer 11

yes ilike poem so match because  when i be ungrer i write apoem

Answer 12

yeah I agree with the rest its nice. You are talking about migrating to a country right....its nice...not cheesy nor boring. very good, it made me smile reading your poem. keep it up! :)

Answer 13

Powerful poem, powerful woman, powerful magic.

Answer 14

nice! This could turn into a great story, if you think about it.

Answer 15

wow.... if i could... ewll.... great job =D

Answer 16

Complex, interesting, mysterious human story. Well written,

Kudos

Answer 17

Very visual and powerful imagery throughout this poem. There is a sense of "dust tinted" desperation in the words.  There is a strong story created by the unfolding images. I love it.  Thank you.

Answer 18

i like it.

it looks like shes coming and hes waiting there for her.

they are carrying out their plan.

and ol mr rattlesnake is the element of unknown.

i have to say, hope is sometimes all thats left, or have.

Answer 19

I like your poem very much and it got me to think that you watch a lot of telly or DVDs , your ideas that you captured in your verses remind me of cowboy films