A Poem The lines in my soul. do you like it?

Question

Why do you always talk so loud as if your talking to a crowd

Do you think you'll get more attention as i wonder why the words love was never even mentioned.

I gave you the best ys i had even though loving you was really quite sad.

It really seems your love died long ago' even before the second show.

Now the time has gone and my lines on my face show it all.

I felt this nightmare coming' to lose the man i loved as my body and soul were shrinking .

All the lies you told as heart and mind went south for the winter ' as your love is like a splinter in my heart.

I feel like my mind has been carrying a hundred pounds wondering why your never around.

The house and dreams we shared are distant memories floating around

.I will survive this sadness i call life waiting 20ys as you said i would be your wife.

Now you'll get a younger one ' and drain her hopes and dignity.

for your sick little fun.

Yes i loved you 20 long years 18 of these were buckets of tears.I should of seen it coming ' but my love was always over writing the pain' as you nearly drove me insane.

Well my love this is good-bye so many tears as my brain d**n near died.You are so selfish and unkind but this is my last stop as i feel like dieing.

Now i see you slither away and know i won't ever have many more happier days..

Answer 1

The words of a woman deeply wounded by her beloved one. Remember, the love in yourself did not died, it continues to shine immensely through your words and thoughts. You may consider to erase the image of your loved one from your memory, and start afresh with a new love that will make your life happy again, but that is entirely up to you to decide.

Very nice poem indeed.

Answer 2

No its self indulgent and whiney.  

Answer 3

I liked this poem a lot but you are not that old why write it?looks like that person the hunter who tortures animals is not amused but s***w him and his views. is not a poetry kind of person but if not he should go to the joke site as he is a joke...Your poems are always good in my book.