A Road To No-Where: A new poem for you to critique, if you please?

Question

Life is a road …

that leads us to no where

An unstoppable ride

That destiny calls

The places speed by

Without hesitation

The lines near the sides

forgotten souls or unknown

The picture is bleary

Distorted truth lies

Of a world without order

One close to demise

The light barely bending

A vision unfeeling

Like a sense of denial

From the warmth of the ride

But where does it end

Our life’s glance existence

The road running out

There’s no reason to dread

Push back the boundaries

That keep our minds poisoned

From the truth of our purpose

We don’t see for the ground

Just one passing story

That leads to no questions

The answers they leave us

For the sake of our life

Silver tongue 21/07/08

(Copyright © Geoffrey Brett)

Answer 1

or alternativly..cheer up it may never happen..!!

LIFE is a road ......that runs from your door

you need to step on it to see something more

from here you can go anywhere in the world

just follow this road and your life is unfurled

...Your way is connected to every place

by walking along you will meet every race

every step new emotions will be there to find

as each new experience broadens your mind

so take a deep breath ....and open the door..!!

we only have one life...... take the world tour...!!

Answer 2

You have a way with words.  Do you write stories too?

Answer 3

This is a great poem. Very thought provoking, my favorite kind!!!! I have been thinking a lot about the subject lately too.

Write more please!!! ; )

Answer 4

Very good. The best I've read on Yahoo. I think alot of people will relate.

Answer 5

i think that some of the other poelpe summed it up this is a great poem but like Michael said "i didnt feel you in this poem it left me feeling cold"  but i did think it was a great poem other wise!!!!

Answer 6

That is amazing! Did you write that?

Answer 7

The journey through life may seem unending and even pointless at times, but the truth of our purpose is there for us to discover. Nice descriptions.

Answer 8

its good, life does seem pointless at times with endless, boring routines, ie wake up, shower, eat, work, go home, eat, watch tv, go to sleep... its a never ending cycle of insane boredom.

Answer 9

Great, leave it a lone and let it stand as is, welcome back!

Answer 10

this is so beautiful.....did u write this?if so u r so deep and i didnt know there were people out there that thought like me...;)thanks

Answer 11

side

Answer 12

You speak for yourself.  You may think that you amble along through life with no goals or targets.  I guess you are just waiting for the end of the road to arrive, which is why you are wasting your time writing this?

Answer 13

very very good! did u write this? if you did keep up the good work and write more!

Answer 14

haha gotta love the air headed fan girls "omg this is so great did you write this? omg your so deep!" hahaha poor kids obviously do not read much poetry if this poem blew them away.

But on your poem, yes it is well written, nothing brilliant, simply pondering existence like we all do. I didn't feel you in this poem, it just seems as if you are throwing bleak points of view out at the reader.....i don't feel your own personality in this.....hence it leaves me feeling cold.

Second stanza clearly stands out for me above the others though. Good job.