A Visual Poem: "Our Conscious Mind Abode 2" - revised?

Question

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=jvhqBrwVhTo

could you please take the time to comment on this revised poem

Answer 1

Love for one another, you know I got to love it, Great piece of work ,well synchronize to make your point.Good flow of thought.

Answer 2

I am so sorry I could not get the full thing on my laptop - purely user inability and lack of knowledge.  I WOULD, however,  love to read and critique your poem, could you post it in written form?  Again, sincere apologies for the trouble.