A free syllable summer haiku. feedback please?

Question

first thing to do

take off these sandals

wash away the sand

also posted on:

http://short-poems-haiku.blogspot.com/2008/08/sand-ii.html

thanks. :)

Answer 1

Simple, and not too cheesy. I like it. :)

Answer 2

that is not a proper haiku....a proper haiku is

5

7

5

yours is

4

5

5

nice try though...very interesting...nice sounding

see mine

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