A girl, Anne, who stayed with my family for 3 weeks?

Question

A girl, Anne, who stayed with my family for 3 weeks, tried to covert me to a Christen.

And even when she went back home to the US she still wrote letters trying to make me see the light, to no avail. So I wrote this poem for her, she stopped writing soon afterwards.

I’m sitting darkness, searching for love.

I’m looking for help from the Great One above.

“Dear Roy, have you found him?” I hear you say.

Ask me tomorrow, don’t ask me today.

I’m looking so hard, but I just can not see.

The wonders performed, are not there for me.

“Just look around Roy, the beauty is clear.”

Tell me tomorrow, if I’m still here.

What am I searching for, what will I find?

Will I be looking until I go blind?

What dose it mater, what can I say?

I’ll tell you tomorrow, can’t tell you today.

I’m stuck in existents, I’m stuck to the ground.

My mind is so ridged, I can’t look around.

What would I see Ann, if I saw the light?

Don’t tell me tomorrow, please tell me tonight.

Answer 1

It is very honest, and I think you showed immense self-restraint in veiling the contempt you obviously feel for this blinkered and opinionated little girl.

I think the poem might have been better still if you had simply let go on what a waste of air she was - but maybe she was pretty.

Answer 2

Fortunately, you didn't ask for an opinion about the quality of this poem. thanks for sharing. I almost get it.

Answer 3

Nice poem, much better than some of the rude ways to tell someone you're really not interested in her message.

You had a couple of typos in this post  -  you probably have spotted them already.  Typing too fast? That's enthusiasm!!

Answer 4

INTERESTING! I loved it. It sounds like your questioning your faith and want to find GOD on your own. Instead of someone forcing you.

BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN!

Answer 5

No wonder she stopped writing to you. Your retardation made her realise there really was no God and the shock of her unwanted conversion to atheism was probably the catalyst for her subsequent suicide.

Answer 6

It dose sound nice