A longer poem in haiku form (again, i am still kinda critical of it myself)

Question

i taste blood & spit

i feel loathing & spite

sociopathic

i dream of vengance

i am falling far from grace

schizophrenic

i sweat, here alone

i hear & see corruption

isolationism

i write these thoughts down

i hope for some redemtion

uncomfortable

Answer 1

It's a bit worrying but it's good. It sounds like you have some issues but it's good to get them out. I like it.

Answer 2

whoa, deep. i like it! :) its very good and i get the meaning ;) nice msg!

VERY GOOD! KEEP WRITING (im a poet too! :D!)

Answer 3

No need to be critical of yourself,it only holds you back (creativily speaking) This is a true peice of work and i love it.Forget what anyone else says.Keep writing.

Answer 4

me think this dry. all line begin i--maybe you talk about someone else for change?