A love poem. What do you think?

Question

It's still unfinished.

The light of Venus, grace of the skies

Shines with brightness in her cloudless eyes

A heavenly joy dwells deep in her heart

An innocent love with no disguise

And o’er that flowing golden hair

So pure, it brings her a beauty rare

A queenly crown should sparkle bright

For she’s a goddess, a maiden fair

Answer 1

I love it. It's a lot better than I do and it so.....like....well....it shows tons of heart

Answer 2

It sounds good. For me a bit mysterious. You say it is unfinished? If so I´ll be pleased to read the finished version.

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