A new poem called Just More than That....what do you think of it?

Question

Sometimes, people like it

Sometimes, not

It doesn’t matter where you can do it

It can show different meanings

It could show love

It could mean saving lives

Or, it means nothing to another

It’s a hug

Hug can be use in dramatic time

Hug could be our support

Hug shows a strong bond

Although, it’s just more than that

A hug shows that you care about someone

A hug is a powerful message

A hug means you are important to me

A strong hug means I won’t let you go

Every hug has a meaning to everything

Every person could use a hug no matter what

The hug could make you feel better

Someone can understand what you’re going through

There is every reason to hug everyone you love

A hug is just more than that

So, what do you think of that? I want to know what everyone thinks about it? Was it that good? Or is it that bad? I wrote this for my next talent show for school. So, should I share this or no? I write very well with poem ever since 7 years ago.

Answer 1

i like it :]

Answer 2

Very repetitive....reading...well good point. I just don't like this as poem. I don't see poetic rythm or even a general flow to it. Sure it is about hugs (good subject choice), but I felt like I was jumping from rock to rock over a raging creek.

Maybe try re-writing with out all those hugs in there. Every one knows what it's about, don't need to state hug that many times, that's all.