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A poem I wrote! Tell me what you think...please not to harsh...?

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She was a young girl,

maybe seventeen.

She had a desire,

a taste for the stage.

She had a voice...

Squirm, Beg

Move, Dance.

It always whispered in her

ear.

For months she fought.

She collapsed.

She screamed.

The voice screamed back.

NO, this is all wrong!

The whisper grew louder,

filled her ears.

Squirm, Beg,

Move, Dance.

For another few months she battled

She pulled

She fought.

The voice fought back.

This time it won.

She gave in...

She squirmed

She begged.

The voice didn't stop

it continued...

Dance, Dance, Dance...

The chants wouldn't cease

She danced.

She danced across the stage

She danced into her mind.

The voice didn't stop...

Welcome to Insanity

The whispers died.

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  1. That is great!!! you go!!!!


  2. FANTASTC!

  3. i dont get it...


  4. i don't really get it, sorry :x

  5. ..but the voices continue on in the insane... do they no longer whisper but scream? It would seem so.

    I love your poem however the last line does not do it for me.

    Insanity is far more than silence or dead whispers..

  6. creepy,sad...i like it. lol

  7. Great job, you should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think.

    I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!

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