A poem I wrote. What do you think?

Question

Wrong Doings

I feel of a million mistakes run through my veins

The ones like forgetting your keys or “accidentally” hitting your sibling.

Those of which are just parts of life.

You get over them.

Little mistakes…

…..

I feel of one mistake.

But oh..it is not like the ones that run through ones veins.

No..

It’s the kind of mistake that sticks to your mind.

Gives you a title.

A title you feel so greatly ashamed of.

The one you plead of letting go of.

But how you know..its there..to stay with you.

Forever..no going back.

A mistake so grand..you feel no more happiness.

For that mistake breaks you down to tears.

Aka:

High School.

Answer 1

i thinks its really good

and  about real life

Answer 2

I like that it's full of detail but how about...

A million mistakes run through my vains,

accidents that cause shame,

Those that are a part of life,

Little mistakes run through,

One mistake felt,

Not one that runs through my vains,

A pin to your mind,

That judges you,

One that makes you feel ashamed,

Stays with me, day and night,

forever on going,

No coming back,

A mistake so grand,

Steals happyness,

It breaks you down to tears.

Answer 3

too wordy