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A poem about suicide want peoples opinions please?

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my friend wrote it not me i just want to see what people think, i personally think its amazing but he is my friend. also hes not suicidal or anything like that its just a poem x

She places all the envelopes in places they can find,

And examines in the mirror her emaciated wreck,

She locks up all the thoughts and feelings heaving in her mind,

With a single tear upon her cheek and rope around her neck.

Lipstick applied artfully, and hair a tidy mess,

She shuns away her final words as no ones there to quote,

She searches through her wardrobe for her very favourite dress,

That will swoon around her ankles as shes hanging by her throat.

Her hands now slightly shaking as her life has taken debt,

And fighting back the water packed behind her bloodshot eyes,

She smokes away the last of whats her final cigarette,

And kicks the chair from under her and issues her goodbyes.

There's churning in her stomach in the moment of the fall,

It silences her future and it echoes of her youth.

A cracking sound that bandies round and bounces off the walls,

He'll find her in the morning, strung up to the roof.

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  1. Very good description of those feelings of emptiness,sorrow,hurt ,pain

    then the finality of discovery


  2. tell your friend i think this poem is really good all my poems are really dark too but im not suicidal or anything this really sounds like something i would write i think you should go to my profile and check out some of mine  

  3. OMG! I think that is amazing.

  4. Its fabulous.  It brought me to tears, made me shiver.  The writer has a great talent and understanding.  Its great.

  5. its dark

    most award winning pieces of art are very dark

    its nice work

  6. Are You the same poet that wrote the elderly L*****n poem that I enjoyed? This one is great, but two depressing poems in as many minutes leads Me to believe that You really need to watch a few hours of comedy. Edit: You're not the same person, so ignore My suggestion.

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