A poem called TRAJEDY that i would be honored if you read, rated, or commented on?

Question

true trajedy is

when you try

for so long

to maintain

that hideous stereotype

of beauty,

you forget the art

of mirth.

after all,

laugh lines

are not attractive.

comments, criticsm, anything. people are in particularly viscious mood this morning, so cut me down!

Answer 1

Kool! What`s your pen name? A J Helmutt?

Answer 2

Solid piece of work. I love your free style, and the words are bitter but still your voice shines through. Keep writing!

Answer 3

It's hard to enjoy tragedy... but, it reminds us of what happiness is around for.

Some people don't truly understand poetry.

I think that laugh lines can be attractive.

I'm glad to have read your poem, thoughtful.

By the way, the words seem more sweet than bitter, to me.

Answer 4

its ok