A poem for your thoughts?

Question

Splat!

By Semper Fi Reborn

My mind is speeding in a work zone.

Will the fines be doubled,

If I'm troubled?

I zip past the signs

That shout my demise.

Pedestrians in lines,

With fear in their eyes,

Run and scramble for safety.

My mind is not buckled.

If I click it no ticket,

Yet I press on my luck like an EASY button.

But my button's stuck and,

I'm not a luck man, it's nothing,

I better keep on trucking.

Mind swerving,

Wheels spinning from the beginning,

Like my brain has a hemi.

Feeling good I jump the curb and go.....

SPLAT!!

Answer 1

boring.

Answer 2

quite a work day.

Answer 3

"Hi!",

It's like that, when you have a mental breakdown.

Very well written.

WELL DONE! : )

Answer 4

lol I loved it very much. I like how you compared your racing mind to speeding traffic.

I wrote a poem similar to this where I compared myself to a computer who`s master board was about to shut down. I was having an anxiety attack when I wrote that one. lol

Answer 5

I think the yawns and boring only came from a lack of experience or an age difference possibly! I thought this was excellent. I understood where each of the the little ads you used came from. So just keep on with your bad self. I like it, which is only my opinion, but oh well. Thanks.

Answer 6

It is my sense

That a poetic license

Don't let you go cruising

When you're clearly losing

Your mind.

I like your meter, but it don't let you park

I like your rhythm, it's your benchmark

I like the poem's music a lot

Does it make you sick? Hope not!

You're kind.

Please stay out of my street

Park the car, use your feet

You ride like a dervish

It's making me nervish

I find.

Saw

Poem,

Laughed

At

Times.

Answer 7

go Semper Fi!

and i hope it was just a case of soda you ran over. lol

i liked the line

zip past the signs.

thats a real moment!

and

my mind is not buckled..

a brain hemi ...

its a nascar day going to work eh? lol

Answer 8

i liked it! a little slow moving but still very good

Answer 9

thought i just wanted to say Hi to You...How is that kid you were watching do..You said something was wrong and you asked for prayer for him...Anyways just thought i stop in for some poem..God Bless You

Answer 10

This was so very good, I like your style of writing ,intriguing ,easy read! I loved your play on the ending word, and looked forward to each sentence to see how you were going  to word the next!  Nice !!!  Cheers !!

Answer 11

Note to Michael: That was my reaction when I read YOUR 'poem'.

Answer 12

*yawn*

Answer 13

very catchy, i keep re-reading it, it's addictive