A poem.. its lame.. but its for my girl..?

Question

Okay... so me and my gf (brittany) have been going out for a while now, and theres another girl who's like obsess with me.. and she told Brittany that I was going out with her too... so now Brittany thinks that I was cheating on her, and I've tried explaining everything to her.. but I dont think she believes me.. I really love her, and I'd never cheat on her.. Well, here's the poem...

(Its for my girl, so when i say you, im talkin to muh girl)

Answer 1

um two things

1) i agree with dxfan45

2) and if she was your "girl" then she would love you enough to realize that you wouldn't do anything like that anyway (unless you already have)(if you have then shame on you!)

Answer 2

What is writing a poem going to do? Get off your *** and talk to her!

Answer 3

Well, it's a very lovely poem, just a few things.

1. You sound really guilty in it. In the line where you say you'll never do anything stupid again, it makes it sound like you DID cheat on her but you promise not to again.

Also, change "I would be nothing with you" to "I would be nothing withOUT you" lol

Apart from that, it's great, and I really hope it works. Good luck!

Answer 4

It isnt lame at all!

I think it's soo beautiful.

I would love it and I would melt if my bf  had written something  like that.

Soo I say go for it and give it to her.

Answer 5

I'm not even going to bother reading it, because im SURE its not lame.

Any poem a guy would give me i'd love, because i'd know they'd take the time and effort in writing it, which makes it a good poem, ya know?

i hope your girl thinks the same.

Answer 6

wow, that's so nice! i hope everything works out between you two! that poem was sweet and if shes the type, she might cry. if shes not the crying type, she'll still probably appreciate it. Good Luck!