A poem would like comments on please thanks?

Question

Is it better to wake

with a drunken mistake,

thinking you've had

a good time?

Or to drink in surroundings

of predictable soundings,

which hangover would you

rather take?

The book and the cover,

still there to discover,

the pages still hold mystery.

Cliche but life is so short,

experience free,

when I'm old and have

no more meaning,

I don't want to regret me.

Answer 1

Very good i like it xx

Answer 2

I like it but what kind of comments are you wanting? Are you wanting to add a title or something?

Answer 3

Well done. It pulls away from normal poems, and is really cleverly constructed. Don't think there's really much criticism to give- and I wouldn't lie to a fellow poem writer :D :D :D Nice one :D

Answer 4

You are so right, life is so short... I like your poem it is reflective. Never regret anything that made you smile.  That's my thoughts.

Answer 5

Great job, you should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think!

I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!

Answer 6

Its good.

I like it.

Comment my poem..?

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Answer 7

very good

Answer 8

ii like it

it is confusing yet simple

Answer 9

poor.

Answer 10

I like it - clever use of rhyme, which I am a fan of.  However, to do it justice I would recommend trying to keep the timing/rhythm of each line (ie. amount of syllables) consistant, so it flows more.

Nice work though.

Answer 11

Its really good!  Better than all the usual "Wrist slitting" c**p you get on here, it's a breath of fresh air!!!