A poem you can relate to? Please Comment!?!?

Question

Trapped

Burning, screaming, chapped, in pain.

I feel as though I'm cursed.

My lips are driving me insane.

Insatiable their thirst.

I let my tongue roll over them

I have to quit somehow.

But then the urge begins again,

I cannot fight it now.

At last, I know I've lost the fight.

I'll have to face the facts.

I hold my weakness, hold it tight;

My tube of Burt's Beeswax.

And as I place it to my lips,

I feel my muscles calm.

And I remain with my quick fix,

Addicted to lip balm.

Answer 1

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!

Answer 2

Kool! Its creative and different! I like it! On the relate to it part I'm not addicted to lip balm but if my lips r chapped and I have some lip balm or chap stick I use it.

Answer 3

Haha

At first i was like

'Woah, this is too freaky'

I have been reading a book my Stephen King called 'Gereld's Game' and in the book the main character is hand cuffed to a bed, alone in the house, with no close nieghbores. She must use all her strength to get a glass of water, which her handcuffs will not allow her to reach. So i guess in a way I could kind of relate to the begining...

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Answer 4

That was nice work Stephen.

People many come saying this and that

But here I praise, and take off my hat.

Answer 5

yeah i can relate to this

i used to feel this way before but then i didnt let it keep me down because i just started holding my head up high and it keeps giving me more power to move on to the future

Answer 6

my lips dont get chapped in summer? good poem though :)

Answer 7

haha omg i LOVVVEEEE that! if anyone on this earth knows what its like to be addicted to lip balm...itd be me! haha :)

Answer 8

cute, funny and a little weird but i laughed so i like it

Answer 9

I don't think anyone is that addicted to lip balm, but it is a very creative poem.

Answer 10

In regard to the matter of mental illness, it seems that the poem is already an admission that you are balmy.

In regard to the poem, this is echt "Steve R." It has a tightly structured meter and a very regular pattern of rhyme. Yet neither interferes with the swift and natural flow of speech. And of course, the infamous steverenian surprise and humorous finale. I always enjoy your work.

Answer 11

I like your poem! And yes, lips can get wind burned or sun burned in the summer as well as chapped in the winter. I think you should send it to Burt's Bees and maybe they would use it in their advertisement or on their website! You are very clever and I love that you make the ordinary, ho hum, and describe it so beautifully! Beautifully??? Well, with STYLE! Great job!  I had an exercise like this at school... take an inanimate object and write a poem. It's good exercise for the brain.

Answer 12

That was great and halarious too , yes love that lip balm!!  Nicely written, Cheers!!

Answer 13

Ok, I'm just going to ask you a question so don't take offense. Do you have a mental illness? Like Bipolar or depression? Because I do and I write a lot of poems like this