A simple verse in the "Carpe deim" tradition -- any thoughts on my afterthought?

Question

When morn's first glistening dew lies down to die

And sun's bold beacon draws the new day nigh

And merriment doth chase the night away

We should charge forth with zeal to seize the day.

Run free and full unfettered through a field

Of golden dandelions that have kneeled

Beneath our child feet of yesterday,

Before the blush of springtime slipped away.

Find love's completion in a full embrace

'Fore set of sun, when we have lost the race

And dusk's long shadows point the way we'll go --

To night time's beck'ning and the cawing crow.

So while the sunlight dances on your face

And you have sight, and sound and sense of place,

Shed obligation, guilt, all loss and pain

And then, come out and play with me again.

Answer 1

Few can play with words and images as well as you!

This is so good!  Question, why does everyone seem to want to kill dandelions?  They are so beautiful and useful. You seized this day well, Sir.

Answer 2

This will be counted among the great pieces in english literature. marvellous poem.

Answer 3

Seize the day, indeed.  Isn't that what I've been telling everyone?  

Gather Ye Rosebuds whilst you may etc.

I was 50 once and in one bound I was 64....where did the years go?...no idea. So, now I'm making d**n sure I enjoy every fun packed minute.

Your poem is beautiful, old-fashioned, delightful, formally created but speaking of freedom. I loved it.  Who are you, by the way?  Have we met before?  I am pleased to meet you, sir.

Answer 4

Wonderful again. I love the second stanza. It took me to a field of basking flowers and overwhelmed with so much joy. Thank you again.

Lulleh