A summer poem, your comments please?

Question

Summer Storm

The gray sky darkens

Silver leaves upturning

Crashing, pounding, now resounding

Flashing, singeing, nature cringing

Torrential floods begin

Thirsty earth drinks in moisture

Harder still the rain it lashes

Suddenly the lightning flashes

And a large limb breaks and crashes

Dying as the storm now gone.

Answer 1

I know a place where such a storm

washed wind and waves and water

Yours is a beautiful poem.

Answer 2

I think it's wonderful, you created a great visual, while i was reading, i witnessed everything. That's talent.

Answer 3

I think it's great.  Your great use of rhythm, and rhyme were all a true joy to read.  I also really enjoyed how the meter would change from a slow to quick pace as you read it.  Excellent write.

Answer 4

I expected lazy bucolic images (missed the title) and found the energetic storm fantastically real.

Here there is a green carpet and pale blue sky with a streak or two of thin clouds. A gentle breeze, songbirds and trees that talk in turn according to the breeze, but only politely.  

Answer 5

luv it. it actually remind me of a summer storm this is a great poem  

Answer 6

good good.

many descriptive words, ryhming but making sense, that's gooood.

Answer 7

I read few poems that conveyed the power of a storm as well as this!

I really appreciate the descriptiveness.

Answer 8

This is not a jab, but I could imagine Willy Wonka reading this.

I enjoyed it.

Answer 9

I loved it!  Taking us there as storm approaches, then its crescendo, till it's finally gone (with word "dying" limb reinforcing its finality).

Really enjoyed it.

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