A tragic Trigee, is it any good?

Question

Speed

The need for speed--------Green light

Faster, faster!----------------Pouring rain

Flying down the street-----Oily and slick

Faster, faster!----------------Median hit

Flying through the air-------No chance

Street sign hit----------------Severed arm and

Then silence------------------The need for speed

In loving memory of Lamar, one of my son's best friends and one of *my* kids. He will be greatly missed.

Answer 1

Too many times this is repeated.  I should be dead myself for some of the stunts I did when young.  Well said.

Answer 2

I am so sorry! Please send this one to Mars.

Answer 3

So sad. I am just lucky that I never killed someone, or me. That's why I drive like a Grandpa these days.

Answer 4

Blessings to you and your grieving family. I am sorry to hear of a young life cut short so tragically. The trigee is the perfect way to express this grief, as grief has many facets. Know that you are in my heart and prayers. Love you, girl,

Eva

Answer 5

A beautiful epitaph.  print it, laminate it, and put it in a plastic frame at the site of the crash.  Better yet have a plastic sign made and post it there for everyone to read.  Maybe someone will slow down.

Answer 6

This Trigee is very good, a great tribute to a young life cut short. I'm very sorry for your loss **Hugs**

Answer 7

Blessings be.

Not a month goes by, or so it seems! a youth kills them selves with speed, of one kind or another or both! in our little corner of the world. Tragic loss for those left behind.

Answer 8

Wow! I have never heard this type of poetry. i knew where you were heading at though, for a first time reader of these poems, i would say that this one was good.

Answer 9

"Hi!"

Thats not too bad. I like the 1st verse and 2nd but I think it lacks a bit on the 3rd. But it still goes together with the story line.

it's very creative how you did it. you can see and feel through the imagry of your Trigee.

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 10

This is intense and disturbing, especially as it is factual.  You did a wonderful job of creating incredible tension and then...the tragedy.  I am sorry for your loss and hope that the writing of this poem was healing for you.  Very powerful.  Thank you.