A trigee -- I hope -- I am not sure at all, this is brand new to me.? Please critique.?

Question

Trigee One

by Tori T ((c) 0806.27)

I watch the clouds drift ...................across an azure sky

ballerinas and ducks dance .........puffs of gray dressed for rain

warrior horses jump and run .........ride the zephyrs as they drip

arrows fly from Cupid's bow..........into the cobalt sea

Answer 1

It's a Tori Trigee Trio! It just proves if we try (new) angles in our poetry it can a free-ing experience. Well written Tori.

Answer 2

I'd say that's a (w)hole in 3!

Nice imagery and lovely wording...(",)

D!

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I likes them tiggery ones I do...

They're bouncy flouncy pouncy founcy....

fun fun fun fun fun

But the most wonderful thing about tiggerys

is You have written one...

You,

have written one...!

rrrrrrrr...rrr

Answer 3

again great work, just keep it up.

Answer 4

By `arrows fly from Cupid's bow/into the cobalt sea,' did you mean to evoke jet-contrails?  I have not yet learned to like this form, but yours operates over a heroic scope, and the third reading presents a vista greater than a muddled sum of the poem's wings.  Thank you; I enjoyed reading this picturesque work.

Answer 5

Well done !!!.......Very vivid & using my favorite colors,,,,,

We enjoyed this read ,,,,,,,,Thank You

Answer 6

It reads well to me (3)!  Thumbs up from me.

Answer 7

azure, cobalt bring colour to me!

arrows fly from cupid,s bow, brings vastness to me, take aim were it lands left to the universe.

trigee? I have not a clue.

what i like is the the opposites.

well done

x

Answer 8

Lovely Trigee Tori. My only Obs. should "gray be grey"

Answer 9

for your poem?.....

i think its ok...

wats the meaning of cobalt sea?

arrows fly from cupids bow.......

Answer 10

This is outstanding. Three very different expressions in one neat little package. This is a model Trigee. TD

Answer 11

This scores a 10.  I really appreciate the imagery and the craftsmanship.  Bravo, Tori!

Answer 12

You successfully created a Trigee!  You are now a member of a very elite club ...

Answer 13

Welcome to the Trigee Club.  Superior imagery. This Trigee is above and beyond, congratulations!

Answer 14

yea, that's a very good trigee.   Beautiful imagery.  Well done.