All right, I tried it again! Does my Phoenix Trigee Work?

Question

Phoenix Trigee

by Elaine Polin

The robot, Phoenix……….joking with poets he

digs through the dust……..laughs at the scientists

searching for life………..…speaks to the heart

on a real, virtual world.......of those reaching for Mars.

Answer 1

Fabulous daaaa'ling, simply fabulous!

Answer 2

Excellent Trigee! May I suggest some economy of words that might sharpen it?

Robot Phoenix.........joking with poets

Digs through dust.....he laughs at scientists

Searching for life......speaks to the heart

On a virtual world......of those who reach for Mars.

Answer 3

You rock!

Answer 4

"Hi!",

That is a very well (OUT OF THIS WORLD TRIGEE) : )

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 5

i am a novice in the poetry field but i do like it. i was not familiar with 'trigee' but i get it! nice! it is almost like a haiku, it condenses feeling into a few words. good job!-blurey

Answer 6

Yes it does. It's excellent!

I especially like the scientist phrases.

Answer 7

You've managed to put the right pieces in place in complementary fashion, with words as fluid as silk. You smudged the colors of your palette and created something unique... red and yellow became orange... energy, happiness, joy, sunshine... how unique you are, as are the things of which you write... well done.

Answer 8

I like Mars,

bars

great dives

lots of jives

trigees too

singing true!

Very nice.

Answer 9

Earth to Elaine... It's perfect!

Earth to Phoenix... Tell Elaine she done good!

Wonderful Trigee... all smooth verses.

Answer 10

Kewl, you have effectively re-programmed Phoenix to interact with us on mars.  Beautiful trigee.

Answer 11

It works, it works!

(Wonder if 'they' know we're up there?)