Am I a good poet? Tell me what you think is good or bad?

Question

¸¸.•*´`*? Distant Dreams ?*´`*•.¸¸

I need some love to hold me down,

to stop me going crazy.

I need someone to call my own,

so baby don`t forsake me.

The world can seem an empty place,

yet who I am wont change me.

For your caress, a romantic test

a battleground of maybe.

Now I look through distant eyes

I want to see what you see.

Will we ever be as one

and whisper love discretely

Passion crept into your dreams

as your heart beats gently.

The chains of hurt are broken now,

for now we have been set free

Answer 1

I was just going to say that it sucked but it was actually VERY good. 9.5 out of 10.

Answer 2

VERY VERY BEAUTIFUL MY FRIEND, I LOVE IT, I GIVE IT A 9.7 OUT OF 10  

Answer 3

yes you are a good poet and you dont even know it.

Answer 4

One year ago UK Ultra posted this poem.

Distant Dreams

I need some love to hold me down,

to stop me going crazy.

I need someone to call my own,

so baby don`t forsake me.

The world can seem an empty place,

yet who I am wont change me.

For your caress, a romantic test

a battleground of maybe.

Now I look through distant eyes

I want to see what you see.

Will we ever be as one

and whisper love discretely

Passion crept into your dreams

as your heart beats gently.

The chains of hurt are broken now,

for now we have been set free.

1 year ago

'Twas you?

Answer 5

Very good! I have one question though, I wish you 'd answer : I could  neither comprehend nor understand the second LINE of the second stanza. Please tell me,  is it grammatically correct ? Or it is you playing with words ?

YET WHO I AM WONT CHANGE ME.

Or is it just my poor English?

I 'd say its the latter, since none of he above has mentioned it.  

Answer 6

Honestly? It's predictable in most places, but you have some really good lines. I love "a battleground of maybe." I think you meant to say "discreetly," though in a slightly more sophisticated poem I might suspect a play on words. If I give you the benefit of the doubt, it raises the level of this poem significantly.

My first suggestion for most early drafts is to get rid of the first few lines and see if it's just fluff. If you start it at stanza two and maybe move the first two lines elsewhere in the poem, that's a good starting point. Think about losing the third and fourth lines.

To answer: yes, you have potential.

Answer 7

there is the view that poetry should improve your life,i think people confuse it with the salvation army

Answer 8

It actually is pretty good! But i would use alternative words, for words like hurt, and such.

But other than that..bravo!