Am I good? please give comments, anything I need to work on? Do i have potential?

Question

Silent Word

My thoughts and images come without question

Overwhelmed with desire, one is afraid.

Even though they are clear and passionately

Brought upon, he is captured with a scare

As uncanny as it may seem, he doesn't know why

This beautiful desire must not be delivered nor written

So many ideas with so much emotion oversees

Its own passion while they go away

He regrets to remember those pleasures and regrets to remind

Should have, would have, he can't believe

That they are lost, it was very clear then

And now its story will not be gladly seen.

Never again he shall commit this practice due to

Wanting to be represented and honored however it may be

It starts over and see's how one can show with practice

To make sure delivery and question will be at constant

Motion and pride.

Answer 1

Beautiful! But here is how I would edit it:

Silent Words

His thoughts and images come without question

Overwhelmed with desire, he is afraid.

Though they are clear and brought upon by passion

He is captured by a scare

Uncanny it may seem, he knows not why

This desire must not be delivered nor written

Ideas oversee an internalized passion

He regrets to remember those pleasures, regrets to remind:

Should have, would have, and now he can't believe

That they are lost, it was very clear then

And now it's story will not be gladly seen.

Never again shall he commit this practice, fueled by thirst for

Honor and representation, no matter the cost

It starts over and he sees the value of practice

To make sure delivery and question will be at a constant

Motion and pride.

Answer 2

Line 1 - Get rid of 'my'.

Line 2 - Add 'when' to the beginning, or try, "One is afraid when overwhelmed with desire.

Didn't like this work. You have a talent for writing, you just need to improve. Your vague, and not very rude. You leave the reader questioning, mystified with unwanted fog.