And for this one too?

Question

The women chatter, chat, chatter

Though I do not hear.

For my safe and private recluse

Does not allow them hither.

And only there do you

Reach out to me

Your distant voice

That I have created in my mind

For I no longer remember.

Those accented s’s

A weak connection to

The homeland that never was.

Those warm, familiar no more

Hands outstretched

To whisk me above and below

What can be true no more.

The shimmer of your tiger’s eye

Mesmerized

I sway…sway away but

All the while

I do not move

Never again will I

Keep all my jewels

In the one satin-lined box

But in the dark

Where they will not sparkle and dazzle

Only then

Will I be safe

Answer 1

This is a light hearted read, short and to the point! I like the flow of it, keep writing you have the gift!

Answer 2

Quite good, perhaps some highlighting here and there, encourage the reader to change the pitch thus avoiding voice drone, will be much more effective, keep at it.