Another love poem....let me know what u think?

Question

another love poem....let me know what u think

watching you from across the room

sends searing pain through my heart.

I think back to a year ago,

when I thought we'd never part.

My love for you just won't die down -

it just grows with each new day.

I wish you'd dare to look at me

and hear what I have to say;

"I love you and I want you back

but these words you just won't hear.

You don't seem to remember them -

all the memories I hold dear.

You were my first kiss, my first love

and now you don't even care.

how could you just blow it away?

We were the perfect pair.

you seem content to let me go -

youre doing fine as you are,

while I'm still missing how we were.

We had the best love by far.......

Answer 1

its very nice but you could have e made three poems out of one

Answer 2

Superb

Answer 3

I’d break it up into about 3 stanzas to give it some structure, and it needs something snappy to finish it with, like

I loved you *****, but what the heck

How’d you like a sockful of sand in the neck?

Answer 4

awe heartbreakingly good... =)

Answer 5

wow better than the other ! 4 sure man that is so good i love it!

and do u just have a natural talent for writing poems?