Another poem for you guys?

Question

Gys, i swear I'm not an emo, this is just something I wrote for my book that I'm currently working on. I'm happy to be told how to improve, I know it's not one of my better efforts, but I'll shut up now so you can read the d**n thing lol..... also, anyone got any ideas for a title?

A sheet of dying rose petals,

Fell upon her face.

Her heart was a bush of nettles,

She used as a hiding place.

A head of auburn waves,

A hand of ivory bone.

Love is what she craves,

No longer to be alone.

Eyes like dewy pits,

And a soul of none but lead.

Emotions cut up, cut up into bits,

Several directions to head...

Answer 1

The only thing it needs is a little help with flow. I can't really tell you so I have to illustrate. Forgive me.

A sheet of dead rose petals

fell upon her face.

Her heart a bush of nettles

used as a hiding place.

A head of aburn waves,

and a hand of ivory bone.

Love is what she craves,

no longer to be alone.

Eyes like unto dewy pits

and a soul made out of lead.

emotions carved up into bits,

too many directions to head.

I hate to rewrite poets, especially those that are well done, but if you will indulge me by reading both aloud and seeing which flows better, I would be honored. As for a title, I am afraid I have no ideas.

Answer 2

I like the poem!  It brings emotions to me and makes them feel pleasent.