Another poem...honest opinions please?

Question

Dream a Little Dream

Page after page

Blank words read aloud

Her visions in life

Mask her like a shroud

A slight tap on the paper

With her miraculous pen

Words flow about

Deliberately rhyming again

A smirk develops

On her velvety lips

Resulting in dimple’s

From the messages that did slip

If only she knew

That her words enchant all

If only she could see

What lies beyond these walls

She cloaks her emotions

With her lovely exterior

Soon she discovers

That she’s not so inferior

Revolting against their opinions

She stands firmly on the ground

Unaware of the place she’s headed

A new life she is bound

Journeying off

Into the abyss

Her words in a book

Bring nothing but sheer bliss

What do you think?

Answer 1

i could not stop reading it

Answer 2

Wow that is So beautiful i love it keep enjoying writing poems!!!!

Answer 3

it's good..

you can bea writer,..

Answer 4

WOW! YOU HAVE A GREAT GOD GIVEN TALENT, DON'T WASTE WHAT HAS BEEN GIVEN TO YOU FREELY, ENJOY IT AND EMBRACE IT WITH ALL YOU HAVE, YOU CAN GO PLACES.. THIS IS A TYPICAL POEM TO HELP OTHERS BUILD THEIR SELF ESTEEM, HELPING OTHERS TO GRASP THE FACT THAT THEY ARE WHAT THEY ARE AND THEY ARE ACCEPTED, AND ARE BEAUTIFUL, A REAL INSPIRING POEM, YOU NEED TO HAVE THIS PUBLISHED.. I WOULD LOVE TO READ OTHER POETRY WRITTEN BY YOU..DO YOU HAVE A SITE I CAN VEIW.

Answer 5

I think your words sound like I wrote them myself.  As someone who writes myself I often feel the same way.  Your very good and I would like to read more of your work.  

Answer 6

It sounds like you want to be accepted by ones who you want to care. Forget them and keep on writing about what you care.

Answer 7

Oh my gosh, that is so awesome! I love it. Keep on writing! =]

Answer 8

Great job !!!! good wording sounds like something that could have been in my book of stuff i write It is a hobby of mine to write short story's and poems and such don't stop you have a gift and a passion for writing  

Answer 9

dmx is great

Answer 10

I like it, I really do. It's got this sense of mystery in this, the words are beautiful, which sums up an excellent poem. The words are simple, every single word flows well with the poem. I love this piece of work.