Another poem? how is it?

Question

Eat or be Eaten Alive:

Desperate attempt to win

sweat down my cheek

it's all or nothing

can't show them i'm weak

i hate this devil's game

one life at a time

waiting for my turn

my position is prime

they seraching for my corpse

i see them in the corner of my eye

bleeding on the battle field

spirit free and flying by

chrome gun in hand

they are ready to fire

we flee from them

it's their desire

a game of hide and seek

where no one comes back

everywhere is a dead end

they will follow my track

they are mass murderers

wanting just a little fun

they won't ever stop

till we're all dead and done

blood seaps through their clothes

dripping down to their toes

no one hears our cries of woe

running but with no where to go

no one is to be trusted

It's eat or be eaten alive

seing the sprawled bodies

wanting only to survive

i give up

on this endless fight

so be it

i'll die here tonight

Answer 1

i like it

Answer 2

you just got jackedddddddddddd ahaha naw im kiddingg i like it its very nicee :]

Answer 3

That poem was heart wrenching, in a good way! Like a story that you grandfather wouldn't tell, because he'd be ummm dead. I really like the vivid images and great word choice. Keep writing, totally going somewhere!

Answer 4

That is fantastic. That is. Fantastic. You're a born poet, Amelia.

Answer 5

I see by your poem

it is about choices

( ultimatums )

its all or nothing

The title is like cannibalism

because eat or be eaten alive

seing the sprawled bodies

( seeing)

The poem is also battle because

people fight and no one wins

People cry but they are not heard

The last paragraph is about fight

because its either survival or death

Answer 6

wow. that gave me chills. you are amazing!

Answer 7

I got a little confused in the beginning because I thought it was about track running in a marathon or a school race or something like that.  I liked the fact that you used the word woe...you hardly see words like that in poetry now a days.

Answer 8

it was really good i liked it! ur really talented keep writing gurliee!!

Answer 9

this is amazing! truly has a deep concept and is really inspirational. in what form, i haven't figured out yet. but i love it. good job!