Another poem. is it ok?

Question

why can't you understand

i am who i am

we argue

we fight

we can't seem to get it right

someday we will see through one anothers eyes

and see each others hidden disguise

when that day comes

i will be ready

our lives will be balanced and steady

come fourth now

and i will show you how

life is to short to waste fighting

Answer 1

It doesn't make any sense.  Whaat are you fighting about? Why do you need to "see through one another's eyes"?

"I am who I am" - you are Popeye?

Seriously. If you are fighting THAT much with someone, then either a) figure out what you are fighting about or b) move on.

Answer 2

It's a bit trite but not bad.

Answer 3

I like it, but I honestly don't know anything about poetry.

Answer 4

It's pretty good....but there's no.....SOUL

When you write you should put everything you've got into the poem.......this is good, but it seems as though I'm reading something that is.....too....rehearsed. Next time you write, just write what you are thinking....everything.....and the poem will be amazing! Like your other poem....THAT was soul!

Answer 5

I really do love this, thank you x

Answer 6

Much better than "Ok" Much, much better...

Answer 7

Breakups between sixteen year olds used to interest me, but my tastes have changed I suppose. No I could really care less.