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Another poem/lyrics, any feedback is appreciated. Also looking for someone to bounce ideas with?

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We tire of prophets

We tire of liars

We thirst for the needles, the pricks and the spires

I will slice myself open and scream Juliet

I will bring you the h**l that you'll never forget

And I'm selling my soul just to break through the mold

For the tiresome puppets have treasures to hold

And I'm killing for killing

And I'm living for nothing

I have opened my ears to the sound of the gutting

Like a fresh fish from sea, first I'm blue now I'm black

Then I'm black and I'm blue and I'll never go back

I will scream for the air that is filling my lungs

As the water escapes and my bloated skin slungs

Itself into a smile, and it might take awhile

But the life once was in me will begin tile

The floors of the shrine that is built on my life

And I'll throw myself onto the gaze of the knife

The knife, all this bleeding and screaming's the same

Oh my rifle, my rifle, I'll trust in your aim

I need your ascension in revealing my name

To the world, on a string, on the bind of a book

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  1. I thought that was amazing, really nice. In my mind I read it slowly at first getting faster and faster throughout. anyway, yeah I liked it.


  2. Bravo  and what a treat, well written, originality flowing of words, kept the interest going!  Yes - loved it !!  Cheers !!

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