Another poem . . .?

Question

. . . I wrote this last week, it hasn't been finished yet. Please tell me what you think, even if you hate it.

On the banks of Helford River

Little stirs tonight

Cosy in their beds each resident

Has said his last “goodnight”

Save for me under thatched roof

And one woman –

Dancing on the moonlit

Immobile waters; a phantom

The trees they may rustle, but

They do so silently

The cottages are like black coals

But are not thus ominously

The stars and the moon peep through

Partitions in cloud

And the woman, she dances

She dances in an ecstatic shroud

Of mystery,

Answer 1

Wow.. i defintly don't hate it I LOVE IT! Your a true writer. I hope to see more from you later on. Keep Writing it is your gift :D

Good Luck And Good Job, A

Answer 2

now i hate to say this i really do! but i think it could use a little bit of work. u have some words at the end of lines when they should be at the beginning of the next. most lines are great! but some dont rhyme right and like i said, some words sound like they should start the next line. oh and punctuation! it might not sound that important but it really really REALLY helps with the flow.

Answer 3

That was pretty good, i enjoyed how it flowed and kept my attention.   cant wait to see how it ends

Answer 4

Wonderful beginning of a vivid and imaginative tale.  Will you finish it so that we may know who the phantom woman dancing on the water is?  I picture all of this happening in absolute silence with just a trace of moonlight shining on the woman.  Very creative poem so far.   Thank you.