Another quirky one. what thoughts on this ? is it even a poem?

Question

There lives somewhere a plant that snores

And one that beats on jungle drums

that one has never heard

They hear the fall of water and call it rain

When it is really tears dropping

from weeping polluted skies

Fog roars

and lions settle about my feet.

A yellow monarch sighs.

Trees, grass and worms all sing

and chant and pray

as do children

their juices gurgle in their veins

like carbonated liquid in a Pepsi tin

I prefer the din of incoherence

The exasperation of an empty plane

and the grumble of rusty rails to

sanity and order.

I like free verse

disconnected thought

If it doesn’t rhyme

Its mine.

Answer 1

No title it - "Would you like fries with that?" OK I'll go with the Parsnip if I really have too. Sigh .....why not brussel sprouts, I love em!

A burst of "spont free" *  poetry never hurt anyone

* spont free - part "born free" and spontaneous and free form

Answer 2

i like how you describe the feelings of nature, and how you compare it to our terrible, pollutant habits.

Answer 3

Poem reads like my mind some times, scattered, so I liked your poem.

Answer 4

i find that completely amazing.

Answer 5

I thought it was truly fascinating.  You have all these different feelings/ expressions that really don't go together, but you made it work!  I really liked your first line,"There lives somewhere a plant that snores."  It is so creative!  You had a nice ending too.  My only advice would be to have a title as to what your poem is about.

Answer 6

Not quirky, but well said.  Its yours, not mine for sure. My compliments.

Answer 7

It is also fine.

Answer 8

I vote no parsnips, please...and I really like the line about juices gurgle in their veins.  Nurses minds are rather weird and I can't   tell you the picture that conjures and I know I shouldn't.

Thanks for the great read.