Any Suggestions for my story's plot? ?

Question

I'm currently writing a story. It's about 5 teenagers who have supernatural powers. They don't age for 200 years though. so two are boor in the 1800's and 3 in the 1900's. that also have a leader who was born in the 1700's. The point of view is from the newest member of these powerful teens, her name is Grace Cooper. Grace is a quiet, sad girl with a a lil attitude. Before she knew she had these powers she moved to ohio (from New York) and is falling for a boy she met named Jared Burns. But the other teens don't think she should continue seeing him but she cant help it. She knows if he finds out her secret he'll have to be killed.

so that's what i have so far with the plot. does anyone have any suggestions on good twists add to make it more unique?

thanks.

-Kara-

Answer 1

Perhaps you can have her keep the secret successfully for a few years and then he can question her on why she is not aging. He investigates and finds out what she is and the others decide to kill him and she has to decide who to be loyal to.

Answer 2

The twist: You reveal that Jared is actually the REAL leader of the group.  

He is the most powerful and does not age for 500 years.  It is a well kept secret.

He is discontent with how the group is being run and decides that now is the time to reveal himself and take over.

The conflict is:  Does his feelings for Grace get in the way of his goal?

Answer 3

Here's a good twist:  the story suddenly ends after only 2 pages.  I'm sure the readers will love it.

Answer 4

Jared Burns suddenly disappears by a secret enemy of hers, of whom she must reveal in order to save her loved one. Only, in the process, he somehow finds out her secret. Try that, improvise, and build from it. (that is, if you like it) Good luck! maybe someday i shall happen upon your story somewhere! I do hope so! ^_^