Any comments on the poem I wrote? Any comments good or bad will be used to improve my style. Thank you!?

Question

Divorce is never easy, especially on the kids.

I took all my hurt inside and passed it on to you,

but you loved me any way.

When my “father” broke me, left me with out a care,

you took me in your arms and dried all my tears,

and you loved me any way.

I wish I could turn the hands of time

and take back what I’ve said,

but even with all the pain I’ve caused,

you love me any way.

I realize now, as the days go by,

I never understood you, I never really tried,

but you love me any way.

I extend my hand now in surrender and hope you do the same.

Let us cast aside the blame

and love each other any way.

Answer 1

U have put a firm foot on the first step of poetry lather. U made me live the scenery, U made a clear picture, even though U expressed only 2 or three elements, but the sincerity of Ur words covered the whole picture. It could  'v been better but then, as its Ur first try, U may lose the innocent tone flow. I like it . Sensitive topic U chose. Keep on writing.

Answer 2

Sounds good. Very deep

Answer 3

I think that it is great!:) But I wish that it would ryme:(

Answer 4

As poems go, this works well as a personal poem. I can see how this can be deeply meaningful and powerful to the writer or even the person addressed. But as a "public domain" document, a lot of the "poetic experience" is lost on a random reader. You could turn that up by using some sort of form or imagery or metaphor.

I don't think it deserves a rhyming form, but certainly something to give it some kind of literary "shape" might help.

Answer 5

scuse please. is rhyming no discipline of poem? scuse english please.

Answer 6

It expresses your mood, but it feels bland, doesn't come off as a poem to me. It sounds more like a journal. If you want it to sound more like a poem, make it harder for the reader to know exactly what you are talking about. It seems too simple, and the words are too overused. Get a good poem book, and you will began to learn the flow of how poetry should sound.