Any comments or advice on this poem?

Question

I have not named this poem yet, so suggest a name too!

You came so far only to lose

A far out cry who’s to refuse?

Choose the easy way out

Or, as we say, face it to a higher place.

Run away or cross gun from each other.

On the coward, flowered way out

Choose the easy way out if you wish

But you bet I will risk being devoured

Sweat or regret

Try or die

Answer 1

i agree with Cassie

Answer 2

I really like it, I'd like it better if it ended with ..."But you bet I will risk being devoured", instead. That's my favourite line in the poem. I think Sweat or Regret would make a better title than a line in the poem.

Answer 3

The last stanza is a little corny, but the first three are really good.

I'd suggest keeping the "I's" and 'you's" out, it tends to make poetry that isn't strictly personal sound preachy or childish.

Answer 4

You left me utterly confused and desperate to understand. So good job! That's what good poetry should do.

Answer 5

Nice poem i think that its really good it makes you think of what your trying to say i think sweet and sour would be a good tittle