Any professional opinions on my poem?

Question

Ok anyone who knows alot about poetry please tell me what you think of my poem? I just wrote this while wondering around my complex in the middle of the night so yeah. I am 13 and haven't been writing poetry long so just you know lower ALL expectations including that of my humor...it's more random than anything. Anyway I have been told it's meaning but I'll still let y'all find one ; )

It terrifies me where I am

But it intrigues me when I am

skulking the way it does

It's the monster under my bed

It's the missing page of a book

It’s the little thing I can’t ignore

It’s my minds occupant

It's what keeps me up at night

And what confines me to these bedroom walls

It's that second shadow always by my side

I don't know about the where/when I am part it dosent quite sound right to me...

Answer 1

*Bursts out of inter-dimensional rift* Sorry, haven't answered in a while, and there's people who might notice, ergo, had to make an excuse.

Anywho...

Your poem....wait gotta read it................huh... it's a little.. all over the place. It's nice, but it's always better to have a meaning in mind, whether made up, or fake, if you want to write a really good poem.

And, don't worry, I don't need to lower my expectations for your poem, cause I don't raise them for older people. I judge poems, not poets. Your poem is very well done.

73 out of 100. Just an opinion, if you don't agree, that's fine. But, what good is literature without opinion?

Answer 2

A professional opinion?

...That poem is unprofessional.

My opinion: It's a good poem.

You might say, it intrigues me.

I definitely know a lot about having been corrected too many times (and far too rudely) when I've written "alot".

As if teachers were too ignorant to understand it.

I think they are. (This is the "my opinion" part of my response:)

Those fools probably confuse it with allotment, or something.

Eye thinc dat onlee fillossiferrs shud bee abel 2 teech ingles.

& stuf...

Answer 3

Yes, I would say that you have the makings of a poet. The most important thing for you to do next is to read great poetry. Kipling and Poe speak in ordinary language, try those two. TD