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Anybody want to read my small peice of prose, please?

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I wrote this for a small project, and would like to know if anybody understands it, for one, what you think it means.

And if you think it is complete rubbish haha,

I am 16, if you were wondering.

You know that feeling when your heart starts beating so hard that you can feel your toes palpitating minutes after you’ve calmed down; so hard that you feel your ribs burn and morph to accommodate the rush of cold blood crushing through your system. It’s so unique that clenching your fist as tight as you can until a pool of blood falls, would seem more comforting.

There is that way your skin tingles like the sting of a sharp metal knife slicing through a freshly opened wound. That feeling when every single one of your muscles contract simultaneously and sends goose bumps all over your body. You are almost certain that everybody around you can see directly inside you and a wave of complete raw emotion and nakedness flush over you. You can feel nothing but the crisp sliver of what you could only imagine. Skin against skin, the cheap metallic clash of something new, and the perfect way a person can manipulate another, without any need for physical contact.

The moment continues in the shock and complete paranormal horror of your lungs rejecting the air it so desperately needs, tensing your body until you feel you might explode if you hold it all in for another second.

Your bones ache and shatter as they brush past them, your minds collide, and your heart is caught in a fraught confusion of panic of where to aim your eyes, and if you look too much like you’re avoiding their contact, even if you want the contrary.

In the seconds to follow as they fade away into the background, the ringing in your ears fades to a dull remembrance, and all the worry that this just might kill you weaken with it.

Your heart slows down to an almost subsequent standard. The throbbing continues its way through your bones, screaming continuously to stand and make a noise, but that can be expected. The sigh that equips your lips escapes, only a little and you can relax again.

I would just like to know if you feel it too.

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  1. This really wracked up the tension and I kept hearing it faster and faster. I felt a lot, and....

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