Anything i should tweak about this poem?

Question

Ding,Dong

she's here again

ding,dong

yet to apologize for what she's done

tick,tock

the time 'till she betrays me again

load the gun,c**k it

pull it to my head

BOOM!

a mistake she will never be able to fix

Goodbye, Mother

Any Ideas? Or is it good as is?I don't want to hear about how F**KING DISTURBED IT IS GOT IT?

Answer 1

I think its a good poem. it fits.

Answer 2

I think it's a good poem.  The only changes I would make would be to change "pull" it to my head to"put" it to my head; and, I would change "a" mistake to "THE" mistake she will never be able to fix.  I would make "the" in all caps to balance/parallel the emphasis on the boom of the gun.