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Are my poems any good...?

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Tragically, the rains pours with a deep sorrow

many do not live to see tomorrow

Tragically, in life some never get control

many do not get to complete their goals

Tragically, not just animals are faced with abuse

many are unfortunate to receive more then one bruise

Tragically, many tears are often shed

the living turn into the dead.

Tragically, the most beautiful creatures have to die

at some point you have to say goodbye

Tragically, war takes more then just one

Violence is almost never done

Tragic is when the sun has set, and your heart, is full of regret.

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We live in a world where nothing is ever the same

New things arising, something different to tame.

And we can never know who friends really are.

If we aren’t careful we may end up with a scar.

Not just the things you see and the people you already know

But the people you meet, and the ones you lost long ago.

Sometimes the meeting of someone new ends to destruction

But you have to learn to deal with a world full of introduction

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Why do we all sleep during the night

The darkness is blinding, putting children in fright

Why do only some die before there time

In fires, earthquakes, and that one fatal crime

Why do we torture the weak, but praise the strong

When they are the ones causing what’s wrong.

Why do we look at the bad but never the good

Saving that life, that no one could.

Why do we use violence to solve all are mistakes

With guns, knives, and bones to break.

Why do we care for those who could care less

When they are the ones messing up success

Why do we risk all we have worked for

Why cant we be satisfied instead of wanting more

Last but not least, why do we always say goodbye

To the ones that never can give a reply

I am only fourteen

Some of you may say I need help, but you cant deny what I say is true.

If you don’t like it, give me some advice, don’t just insult me.

I have a lot of time for improvement, so well see what happens.

Also, for the first poem I had Tragically at every line.

People told me they did not like it so I did it every other line.

Tell me what you think.

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  1. I LOVE THEM!

    The first one made me cry ):

    Like you have a real gift they can really move people to opean up!

    :)


  2. They are good :) you are a thoughtful person

  3. Your poems are excellent girl!! I love them. You should definitely pursue this talent you have. They are awesome!!!

  4. You have a talent ^_^ Keep practicing, no need to question your work if you are only growing in it! My poet friend is challenging herself with one description or a poem every day, maybe you should try too! :)

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