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Are these any good?

by Guest32466  |  earlier

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i wrote these poems, what do you think to them, also got any ideas for titles??

1.

She never dared to say it,

It’s a sad fact but the truth,

She couldn’t bare to say it,

What would she do?

She never dared to say it,

Even though intended,

She never dared say it,

For he could be offended.

She was just a child of 12,

Whilst he himself was 16,

She was very young,

Not even a teen.

She never dared to say it,

The fact that she loved him,

Now she is sad, young and single,

Not even 13.

2.

The young girl sat alone

In a small, dark room

She had learnt to call home

In the bed her teddy layed

Without a head

Since she got raged

The child had never seen real daylight

If she had one wish

It would be to go outside

That was all three years ago

But still the child is scared

Of the parents that said they loved her

And locked her up under the stairs

3.

A bluebird flies

A child dies

A father cries

The murderer denies

He’s locked away

He’s there to stay

The child is gone

The deed is done

i have more!!

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  1. are they all supposed to be togather if not separate titles

    1.young forbidden

    2.idk sorry cant think of one

    3.the death of youth


  2. You may find the answer here:

    http://www.shortpoems.org/poems/what_mak...

    Just keep writing...

  3. i think they are deep,sad,1,its a crying shame.or,hopelessly devoted,2,locked inside,or,home alone,3,taken flight,or,gone but not forgotton,peAce,i wish you well.

  4. Not too good, but I've seen worse. You mean 'bear', not 'bare', by the way. You're obviously still young - keep trying. You have been 'Ianoed'.

  5. I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!
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