Are these lyrics ok? improvements and title needed :D thx?

Question

i havent decided on what to call it yet so any ideas then let me know. thx

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{v1}

so i was the *****?

the one in wrong?

you cant see

that i tried so hard

to fight for what we stand for

but you couldnt see...

just how much you were hurting me!

{chorus}

so many times you've tried

to get me back on your side!

your standing there blinded

you only see what you wanna see

eyes on me...

but you gotta get over me

{v2}

i hurt you bad

and im sorry

but i dont regret it

because it was right

it wasnt just hard for you

letting you go hurt me too

but i cant keep fighting you!

{chorus}

{bridge thing i dno}

i walked away

but you cant take it!

i see your broken hearted

and it killed me to leave

so many nights i cried

but i moved on!

{chorus}

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Answer 1

They are veryy qood.!*

I've been tryinq to *** up wit a song of my own but i cant seem to.

Its veryy hard and yur song is reallyy good.

Are you a good singer.?*

Answer 2

I like it.. but remember that "!" is only used when someone  is yelling it

Answer 3

that was very disturbing!!! i don't really have a comment! bye! good luck with your joyful song! :)

Answer 4

very nice.

Answer 5

you krazy kid. Sounds good. All you need creative instrumental players.

Answer 6

I'm confused. Who is hurting who? Who wants the relationship and who doesn't?

Answer 7

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. YAWN!

Answer 8

you can call it "the difference in our eyes" or "eyes on me" or "looking into us" the song is very heartfelt so personally i would love to see a title come from the original author because it then is truly your piece of art.

Answer 9

I need a tune to go with it realy, maybe you could do a voice recordin & post that??

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