Are these proverbs?????? please critique. Cheers : )?

Question

"Hi All!",

1.To receive the best sentence, make sure your rich.

2.Government wages are free lottery cheques for superanuation and taxes.

3.the cost of oil is reduced when stolen.

4.It's no more cheeper to live, than it is to die.

Answer 1

These are carelessly spelled and composed proverbs.

1. "your" = "you're"

2. "superannuation"

3. Capitalize the "T" at the start of the sentence.

4. "cheaper" and it ought to be "cheap"; delete the comma too

If you write proverbs, you aspire to the authoritative and pithy. Authority and concision are undercut by poor mechanics. Ideally proverbs are said with the grace and balance of Abraham Lincoln or the King James Bible, possessing balance and parallelism.

More comments:

#2 makes more sense if you remove "free lottery" because the idea of a lottery is not germane to the thought and "free" isn't quite fair, as it overstates the case, though it can be left in.

#4 I don't think I understand; at least the meaning seems opaque to me. Aphorisms and proverbs are an 18th century style of prose, and that period valued lucidity, wit, and explicitness.

Answer 2

I didn't enjoy so much the second, and the furth will sound better 'It's cheeper to die than live. 1 and 3 rules